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Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since computer technology can replace their functions. Do you agree or disagree?

#libraries #waste #money #computer #technology #functions
Some argue that spending lots of money
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public
libraries
 is not
worthy
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,
now a days
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nowadays
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 technological advancements like
computers
 can be used
instead
 of visiting the
libraries
 physically.
This
 essay agrees with the given statement the reason being that with
the
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computers
one
 can get more latest literature and articles and
one
 can save valuable
time
of
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 travelling from home to
libraries
.
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first
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computers
 which are connected to
internet
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one
 can come to know
regarding
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, very recent
information
 about
literatures
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literature
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 and articles which may not be possible by visiting the
libraries
, because
these latest
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information
 has to be published, printed and made available in
libraries
then
 only
one
 can access to that recent
information
. To quote an instance
now a days
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 all most all countries implemented
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computer-based
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computer based
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 education and students can easily come to know about recent developments around the world, which
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many
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 not be the case for the past 4 or 5 decades. Another reason
being
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,
computers
 can save a lot of
time
especially
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to
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the
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scientific researchers whose every minute is valuable for their organizations,
one
 can sit at home or office and can access
the
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information
 with the help of technology
instead
 of visiting
libraries
 physically. By doing
this
 especially research organizations which are located
at
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 remote areas can save
lot
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a lot
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 of
time
 in travelling. The
beset
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best
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 example is pharmaceutical industries which are located mostly outside of the cities due to the concern of polluting the
ground water
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groundwater
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 and air, can easily access
the
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scientific
information
 with the help of
computers
 without visiting the
libraries
. In a
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nutshell
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nut shell
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,
this
 essay has shown the right causes
of
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 not spending more
funding’s
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in
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libraries
 because
of
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with the advancement of technology
one
 can get the latest
information
 and save
their
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valuable
time
in
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travelling.
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