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Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since computer technology can replace their functions. Do you agree or disagree?

#libraries #waste #money #computer #technology #functions
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public
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worthy
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,
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 technological advancements like
computers
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 can be used
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 of visiting the
libraries
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 physically.
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computers
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one
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 can get more latest literature and articles and
one
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 can save valuable
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 travelling from home to
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computers
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 which are connected to
internet
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one
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regarding
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, very recent
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 about
literatures
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literature
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 and articles which may not be possible by visiting the
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, because
these latest
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information
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 has to be published, printed and made available in
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then
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 all most all countries implemented
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computer based
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 education and students can easily come to know about recent developments around the world, which
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many
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 not be the case for the past 4 or 5 decades. Another reason
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,
computers
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 can save a lot of
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to
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scientific researchers whose every minute is valuable for their organizations,
one
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information
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 with the help of technology
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 especially research organizations which are located
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 remote areas can save
lot
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 of
time
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 in travelling. The
beset
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 example is pharmaceutical industries which are located mostly outside of the cities due to the concern of polluting the
ground water
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 and air, can easily access
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scientific
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. In a
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nut shell
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,
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 not spending more
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in
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libraries
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with the advancement of technology
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 can get the latest
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valuable
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travelling.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • repositories of books
  • promoting literacy
  • community engagement
  • equal access to information
  • digital divide
  • accessibility issues
  • personalized assistance
  • educational programs
  • cultural events
  • safe spaces
  • community meetings
  • tactile experience
  • preserving historical documents
  • important cultural repositories
  • fostering a sense of community
  • communal hubs
  • serene and focused environment
  • conducive to study and reflection
  • irreplaceable value
  • distracted environment
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