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Environmental problems are too great to be managed by individuals. Real change can only be made at government level. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#individuals #change #government #level
Adjustment and modification are deep concepts in human life ,whether ,it would be in hands of ordinary individuals or high classes of society would make a decision about conflicts has not still well understood ,due to
this
 fact , I am going to give some pieces of possible theories that only extraordinary peers are been able to change the world or another theory that assumed humanism is the basic solution for making changes . In a beginning , complicated positions might be created by high-level society members, because,they have more power and authority to push on the country ,due to
this
 fact, poor management and dishonesty of policymakers might be some reasons for shaping our world ,
for example
 , the level of unemployment status in the USA was a problematic situation from 2011 to 2015 that has been presumed is influenced of unlimited interfering of great bank mafias on the control of marketing in
this
 country ,
however
 , it has been understood ,
this
 tackle has not been solved by the authority of every person and needs to more attention from high institutional organizations to correct it like a justice organisation.
Although
 it is inevitable that awareness of citizens is essential for some situations ,
for example
, well-educated people might be more cautious about their own votes to politicians ,
however
 , It seems in the wide range of the community which is not effective ,but, the behaviour of groups and rituals have been described by every member on that and it is identified that our country will move toward which direction.
As a result
, answering to
this
 argument that solving social problems are in the power of the government or nation has not an exact reply,I opine the interaction of both can be handled critical situations ,because , whole decisions of the government in accompany of behaviours of different classes of persons have been played a role on it .
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