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Some people enjoy change, and they look forward to new experiences. Others like their lives to stay the same, and they do not change their usual habits. Compare these two approaches to life. Which approach do you prefer? Explain why.

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Some
people
 like to live in the same house,
have
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and have
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 the same job and habits all their lives.
However
, others aspire to
changes
 and new
experience
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experiences
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. Personally, for several reasons, which I will explain below, I prefer the
first
 approach to
life
.
First
 of all,
changes
 in one's
life
 bring many benefits. One tries new things
,
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 and gains new knowledge and experience. I think it is great because without
changes
life
 becomes boring. I always try to make
changes
 in my
life
.
Moreover
, when I feel that my
life
 is boring I do not feel well about it. I feel like I spent those days for nothing. I did not do anything exciting, I learnt nothing interesting and I just wasted my time.
Second
 of all,
people
 need
changes
.
Furthermore
, we need obstacles to overcome and reach our goals. I believe that
changes
 make us stronger, more persistent, more self-confident, and more patient.
Also
, I feel that all
people
 who succeeded in
life
 like
changes
 and new experiences because it is impossible to be the best in some field without perfecting the present knowledge and gaining new experiences.
People
 catch every opportunity to learn more and change their
life
 for the best.
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 the other side,
people
 who like their lives to stay the same are very permanent. They have the same job all their
life
, the same habits, the same weekends and even the same years in and years out. I think it is boring. What will they tell their children about their lives? What kind of contribution will they make to society? I think
such
people
 are just afraid of
changes
. In conclusion, I think curiosity and aspiration for new experiences are two of the main reasons for human evolution.
People
 always wanted to break limits and gain more knowledge and experience. So,
people
 who enjoy change are the engine of human development.
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