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Many people believe that modern music can have a negative impact on the young. Others believe the effect of modern music is positive. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

#people #music #impact #effect
It is true that
music
 has become a universal language across the world influencing many people from old to
the
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young.
Music
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 industry produces a wide variety of songs each year, but the question of whether
music
 has either
positive
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 or negative impact on youth is up for debate.
To begin
 with, current hits cover
such
 topics as violence, terrorism, racism and different political issues and in many cases, they use explicit language to deliver their messages to the public.
For instance
, rock and rap
music
 are full of rude expressions and foul language.
As a result
,
this
 kind of
music
 is really harmful
for
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 youngsters because the psychological state of their minds is easily influenced and may look at these musical artists as
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model
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, trying to imitate their inappropriate style of conversation.
Consequently
,
this
 type of
music
 covers heavy issues and proves to have a poor influence on
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youngsters.
On the other hand
, some critics claim that modern melodies are more catchy and better sounding than the tunes made by the previous generation of artists. Nowadays, thank
to
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internet
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, youth can listen to any type of
music
, from all around the world. Recent research has proven that more than 73% of adolescents managed to socialize easier with their
peers
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 thanks to
music
. It goes without saying that being
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fans of the same group
unite
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 people, they feel like they belong to a larger community. In conclusion, personally, I believe that modern songs have more of a negative effect rather than a positive one. Albeit it can be changed, provided that it doesn’t use explicit lyrics and start covering lighter topics to make people more positive rather than depressed and anxious. Originally
music
 was invented to make our life more joyful, not sadder.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lifestyles and behaviours
  • glorify
  • distract
  • academic performance
  • self-expression
  • identity formation
  • source of inspiration
  • social and political messages
  • amplifying
  • accessible
  • influential
  • parental and educational guidance
  • critically analyze
  • responsible consumption
  • mitigate
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