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Should not force children to learn a foreign language.To what extent do you agree with the statement.

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Nowadays,most parents make
children
 learn a foreign
language
 because it has gained in popularity day by day.
Children
 must fulfil their wishes but parents should help them to the right path.In
this
 essay the benefits and drawbacks of forcing
children
 to qualify for foreign
language
. Everything is developing in modern life and we can see the result of
this
 in foreign languages.
For instance
,many countries have chosen English as their
second
language
,and everything namely documentation is in English.
Therefore
,parents and teachers force students to qualify for foreign languages.,
Moreover
this
 helps
children
 to develop their own personalities,expand their thinking and learn about the customs and traditions of other cultures.
However
,learning and teaching cost a lot of money and if the child does not want to,it is just a waste of time and money.People become alienated from their own culture and get attached to the
language
 of the country they are learning,they become a person of that country and do not think about others around them.
Therefore
,everyone should do something they are interested in or should be encouraged by their relatives or teachers.After being forced to learn it,it will be very difficult and useless,but if the child is left to their own devices,I think that their work will be of high quality and effective.
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