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Some people say that parents should choose the major\degree for their children to study at universities. Others think that children should be free to choose. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe
Parents
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 have an irrefutable role in guiding their
children
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, while others think
children
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 should decide about their future.
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 their recommendations should be considered by
children
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, I think it is essential that
children
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 be free to choose what they want to study or do.
This
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 essay will discuss both views.
To begin
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 with,
parents
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 because of their experiences and knowledge know more about aspects of any major or job.
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, they can choose a good degree or field of study for their
children
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.
In other words
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, they have seen different things about a lot of jobs and their consequences which
children
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 probably do not aware regard those matters.
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, my mother forced me to study civil engineering because she thought it led to a lot of money, while she did not consider my talent or interest.
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, if the
parents
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 want to choose a major, they will not consider their
children
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’s talents.
On the other hand
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, any child has a specific talent which should be considered in his or her future career.
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 the
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 and even the government should prepare enough infrastructure for
children
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 in order to let them know about their talents or interests.
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, according to their interests
children
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 can choose their goals and degrees.
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,
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 freedom, encourage
children
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 to try hard to be successful in the forthcoming because they have a passion for doing their favourite work or activities which are in line with their talents.
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, we could expect that
children
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 who are freer about choosing their degree or major, will be more successful than other
children
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. In conclusion, in spite of
parents
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 could leave a positive effect on their
children
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 to choose the right things due to their experiences, I believe
children
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 should be free because it helps them to be successful people in their life.
moreover
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,
parents
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 and the government have a key role to encourage them to make decisions according to their capacity .

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • practical choices
  • job market
  • career longevity
  • motivation
  • personal satisfaction
  • talent
  • commitment
  • engagement
  • foster independence
  • foresight
  • life experience
  • fleeting interests
  • peer pressure
  • cultural contexts
  • mental health issues
  • academic performance
  • compromise
  • dialogue
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