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Many people argue that in order to improve educational quality, high school students should be encouraged to make comments or even criticism on their teachers. Others think it will lead to loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Most people convince that
students
 should be allowed to criticize their instructors for the sake of educational improvement, whilst others believe that
this
 kind of behaviour leads to a loss of respect and discipline in the classrooms. I reckon that
both
 sides are equally essential and significant. On the one hand, feedback given by
students
 may contribute to improvements for
both
teachers
 and schools in terms of intensity and education. By pointing out mistakes in
teachers
' teaching methods, the quality of education would increase considerably.
Moreover
, in most cases, the level of comprehension of
students
 relies not only on the content of the lesson but
also
 on the way
teachers
 conduct it.
Hence
, without the comments from learners, it would be tough to realise whether the speed of the lesson is appropriate or not, which may eventually make impact the quality of the lesson.
On the other hand
, there are several drawbacks prohibiting
students
 from make criticism or any form of feedback to their
teachers
.
First
 of all, opinions vary from student to student and it would be unsurmountable for
teachers
 to find a way to satisfy all learners.
Secondly
, some
teachers
 can be vulnerable to the negative words of
students
 as they feel that their efforts deserve more than feedback. The idea is widely spread among Asian countries. In conclusion, according to the given facts and arguments from
both
 sides, I suppose that
both
 opinions are right in some terms.
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