Sales companies often try to recruit people who are motivated by money, as they believe that it will make them work harder. do you believe people are motivated to work hard by money and what other factors should be considered when searching for new sales staff?

Marketing organizations often consider and it seems true too that monetary perks can help to achieve
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output from a
person
.
Although
there are many other factors
for example
a
person
’s
behavior
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, loyalty, sincerity, attitude toward
job
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, education and prior experience cannot be overlooked while hiring someone. In
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paragraphs will talk about both perspectives in detail. On the one hand, having enough money and
to be
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able to
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your family in
an
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respectable way is
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responsibility.
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them with the basic need of life is always prioritized by an individual,
hence
luring someone with tempting incentives and salary can get the best out of a
person
however
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,
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If you have a roof over the head, food to eat, and money to educate your offspring you would not be all the time worried and can focus more on your
job
and progression of
company
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, which in turn will yield more profit and expansion for the company.
For example
, most managers don't mind staying late to complete their tasks.
On the other hand
, a
person
’s background or earlier work experience is
also
a key requirement while recruiting
for example
latest research published in the Paris newspaper highlighted the point that most
of
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employers
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prefer to hire a
person
with already good command of their work so that, they can immediately start and there would be no need of orientation sessions and waste of time on training for specific
job
requirements. It is said that
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tummy and
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worries
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mind
works
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better. If the
sales
company would cater for these along with other prerequisites/ requirements for
sales
job
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, it will accrue better
sales
vis
a vis profits
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. Proverbs in some cases
goes
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well that the employee earns his incentives by himself”
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In conclusion, higher salaries and
sales
commissions can move a
person
in the organization for more productivity but other characteristics
be
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also
given due consideration.
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