Some people say that advetising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things . others people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it . discuss both the views and give your opinion?

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Currently, a number of
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think,
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advertisements have a vital role to affect our ideas
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buying new things, while other
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claim that advertising is very common among customers and has
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important effect o their decisions. In my point of view, advertising is highly essential for
people
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and I will discuss both views and my opinion in the forthcoming paragraphs.
Undoubdtedly
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, advertising is so considerable to our choices for some reasons. The prominent reason is, with the advancement of technology, producing a
advertise
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is more suitable, and the quality of it
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is higher in
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comparison
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comparison
with
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. Due to
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fact, the impression of an advertisement is more magnificent than past.
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, they are going more successful. To clarify, there are many various ways for publishing an advertisement.
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, there
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a range of social
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media
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medias
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media
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or tv shows which have a large number of
aduiances
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audiences
audience
that are influenced by their shows and broadcasts. Another reason that I can mention is competition. To clarify, the number of companies is dramatically increased, so one of the
key
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of
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success is advertising
that help companies
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that help company
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to
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boost their
impacts
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impact
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on
peoples
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beliefs
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beliefs
.
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, some individuals claim that advertising has
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not
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no
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affect
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on society. Because
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they think, it is a waste of time to pay attention to them.
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,
people
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not paying attention to them and make their decisions with independency
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regardless
regrardless
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regardless
of
commercials
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the commercials
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which are
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on tv.
However
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, advertising is one of the significant aspects of a company without any doubt. To conclude my essay,
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a group of
people
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think advertising is useless without any benefits. In my view, it plays a vital role in persuading
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to
buying
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their products.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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