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Many manufacturerd food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many
people
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 want to maintain a healthy lifestyle for long-term benefits. Most food manufacturers aren't always focusing on healthy
products
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 and produced sweet
products
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 as per market trends.
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 of all,
people
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 should limit their
sugar
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 intake
thus
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 they should be careful about sweet
products
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. Since varieties of
products
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 are easily available in supermarkets and convenience stores,
people
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 started to buy them easily without noticing the content inside.
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, they like to consume
such
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products
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 more and more as they ignored the potential health problems. Many of those
people
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 usually have long-term health problems to deal with in their later life. So,
this
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 matter should be well educated to wider
consumers
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 for their judgement and awareness of potential harmfulness.
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, most of the sweet
products
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 are easily accessible at any store which creates a competitive market among manufacturers. They produce many affordable
products
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 to attract many
consumers
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 and sales without limiting the level of
sugar
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 used in their
products
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. If they made their
products
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 more expensive as per
sugar
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 level, some
consumers
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 may stop consuming them. Because of the limitation in alternative
sugar
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-free
products
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, many
consumers
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 will still pay more for their beloved
products
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. In conclusion, I think manufacturers should clearly describe the
sugar
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 level of the
products
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 and separate them with different colours or labels if possible. I don't believe increasing the prices of
products
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 would solve the
sugar
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 intake but food are just costlier
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. The authorities and producers should work together to promote health awareness programs for long-term benefits.
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