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Nowadays, in the society consumer goods are cheaper to buy. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

#society #consumer #goods
These days the products used by
the
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individuals are
much
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affordable
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 to purchase. I certainly opine that even though it
have
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few
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 drawbacks, positives have an upper hand which I will depict
it
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in the following passages.
To begin
 with,
hence
 the rate of consumer goods
are
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 reduced to a greater extent it is paving
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the ways
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ways
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 towards eradicating starvation. Because it is found that
majority
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 of the world's population is coming under the poverty line since
,
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 the price of consumer goods
such
 as rice and grains are lowered majority of the population can have
privilege
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 to consume these food grains which eventually
lower
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 the famine in the nations.
For example
, in Tamil Nadu government introduced a scheme to provide rice at 2 rupees which
was
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 successful and it was found that poverty around the state was reduced to a greater extent. Once the price of daily use commodities
are
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 made cheap for
purchasing
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the purchasing
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 power of people will increase and eventually brings fortune to the nations by
increase
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 in life expectancy.
In addition
, it can even help to decrease
child
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 mortality rate. Once the daily use
protein
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of protein
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 supplements and cereals are made affordable,
majority
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 of the mothers would be able to consume
when
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them when
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 they are in their maternity period which
provide
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adequate
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 level of supplements for the child in the womb. For an instance, In Africa, during
the
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pregnancy
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 the apex authorities
provides
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 adequate protein for the mother which is
cost
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cost-effectively
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effectively
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 and reflect the result in the
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newborn
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new born
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with
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health
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 and immunity. It is important to bring down the infant mortality rate
through
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by
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 providing
the
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supplements at
lower
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 cost helps
this
 scenario.
On the other hand
, when the fare of daily use products
are
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 made cheaper profit margin for the authorities along with the producers will be lowered which may
results
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 in the withdrawal of farming done by the individuals. To illustrate, recently when the return of tomatoes decreased considerably most of the farmers who were producing
this
 product turned their land for cultivating other
high yielding
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 crops. To conclude, it is important for
the
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nations to bring the daily usage of food grains cheaper because it certainly
improvise
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the
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life expectancy and lot many advantages. Even though, it
have
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few
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a few
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 demerits positives take the leap.
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