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All of us, even small children, know that in the
novel
 «Crime and Punishment», where a student kills an elderly lady with an axe,
but
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not all of us really read
this
 book. Let's dive into
this
 work and figure out why many schoolchildren love and hate it so much. He tells us about poverty, hopelessness, illnesses,
problems
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and problems
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 that the heroes of
this
novel
 face every day.
In
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 the
center
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 of attention in the work is Raskolnikov. He is a poor student who committed the murder of an old elderly lady. On the one hand, he did a really horrifying act, and there can be no forgiveness for him,
on the other hand
, he did it out of his strongest motivation and moral norms in his head. The old pawnbroker is a really nasty and unpleasant character. She never takes into account the life circumstances of her debtors and knocks out debts at any cost. Dostoevsky does all
this
 in order to show us, the readers, that
such
 a person as the protagonist of his
novel
 has a chance for rebirth. Raskolnikov goes
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 hard
labor
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,
survives
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and survives
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 the death of his mother. Raskolnikov repents and loses all that he had. The author showed in the work the plight of that time. Everywhere there were poor people, they did not have the opportunity to earn. Society is degrading,
mired
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and mired
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 in theft. But, despite
this
, people in the
novel
 know
such
 feelings as love, compassion,
caring
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and caring
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 for others. These problems of society are still relevant today.
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