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In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is considered very important. Why might this be the case? Is this a positive or negative development?

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In certain
countries
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 people struggle many years of their life working to save
money
 and buying a
house
 and renting one could be only the
first
 step for getting out of their parent’s home. I have my opinion and going to discuss it
along
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 the essay. Well, many people worldwide usually start their life renting a place to live, and most of them spend many years
to achieve
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 these goals. According to a financial specialist magazine buying
house
 is not the best investment to
apply
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money
,
however
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 several individuals feel better when they are living in and owning property. In my opinion is healthy when a family conquer the goal of buying a
house
, for mind and heart.
On the other hand
,
an
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owning
house
 is not a
synonymy
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of
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 health and financial situation as well as who lives in a
rent
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rented
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house
 is not a
synonymy
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of
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 poverty. There are who defend that investing
money
 in the stock market is better than stocking all
money
 in material goods.
For instance
, my oldest brother and his family are living in a rented
house
 where they took
this
 choice, so they can invest all their
money
 in diverse investments and it’s okay. I advocate for a light and healthy life, and it is the way they’ve found to increase their profit. In conclusion, no matter the way people choose how to invest their
money
 the right importance is the comfortable feeling it causes. Indeed, buying a
house
 could be the
first
 step
for
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 becoming an investor.
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