Governments investments in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. Do you agree or diasgree?

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Directing government investments has been a common debate in many countries. One debate could be placing investment towards
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or public
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. It is favourable in developing countries to direct government contribution towards public
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than investing in
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. These investments could provide adequate
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systems and free high-standard schooling systems for residents. If you live in a developing country, people would prefer the authority to provide a fair share of public
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. These
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could ease the resident from their day-to-day struggles
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. I used to live in Egpyt, commuting to work or even doing the simplest chores could end up spending immense hours in your car or public
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, if the regime worked on improving
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sector, most people would prefer to take public
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than their personal cars.
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fewer cars would be commuting and traffic jams especially during rush hours would be less.
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is the food for the soul and a vessel to transfer culture, free qualified education for citizens should be a priority. In the process of building a developing country schooling and health are always the driving wheels. Even highly educated nations are more able to absorb and admire
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. Another example of Egypt
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is the fact that Egypt not only holds one-
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of the world's monuments and
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pieces but
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encompassed with cultures that go back more than 4000 years.
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, the lack of literacy and exposure aided in the deterioration of its tourism sector.
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it would be better to invest in education
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. Developing countries' leaders should focus on public interests
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, people should have reasonable living standards before shifting towards
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, I agree that government should focus the financing on public
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before
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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