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To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population, a country should make use of edible insects as a food source. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but harvesting them will also negatively affect nature. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects?

#food #support #population #country #insects #source #people #nature
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a
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rising inhabitant
lead
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 to
lack
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 of food supply so
insect
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the insect
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 is one of
choices
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 to support
people
’s consumption. While some
people
 consider that nature will be interrupted by hunting lots of
insect
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insects
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also
its
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 is not healthy for eating. In
this
 essay, the advantages and disadvantages of consuming flies will be discussed as follow. Pros of
insect
 have actually lots of things because it holds various
of
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protein types so
it
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 can boost humans’ energy as much as
people
expectation
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.
Moreover
,
bugs
 are less of
a
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waste
calories
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of calories
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 for
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human
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the humen
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humen
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human
 body and
also
 it’s appropriate for digestion.
Hence
,
insect
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the insect
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 is edible things which come together with
huge
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 benefit.
For example
,
people
 who prefer to eat
bugs
 often get beautiful body shapes because of less fat and high protein.
Therefore
, flies are one of the ways that can support the diet of humans.
Nevertheless
, consuming
bugs
 excessively can cause terrible problems because it has some substances that be able to block vitamin absorption in the body.
In addition
,
people
 who got high blood pressure, diabetes, or some health condition will be in danger because of overwhelming protein.
For instance
,
bugs
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are
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fried with massive oil can increase double of fat for health.
Thus
, it should be considered to consume
this
 kind of food because it still has some evil effects on our bodies. To conclude, even though
insect
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insects
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get
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 colossal benefits to our health,
it
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we
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 should be concerned to eat in the correct way. Because
of
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serious issues will happen to the physical functions. Eventually, I still won’t advise consuming it without having knowledge.
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