It is neither possible nor useful for a country to provide university places for a high proportion of young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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that governments supplying university diplomas for youngsters is useless and impossible. In my opinion, I completely disagree with that. First of all, the established education industries in certain developed countries have a huge budget for staff
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and facilities, and even provide sufficient scholarships for undergraduates. Famous universities like 'Harvard University' or 'Cambridge
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' are examples of
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educational samples and they offer opportunities for the majority of young people all over the world.
Furthermore
, education industries can contribute to the revenue of the host country, which means that the students either foreigners or local citizens have to pay their accommodation, transportation and food fees.
As a result
, universities play important roles in the local tax system.
On the other hand
, the job market is becoming increasingly competitive, and academic qualifications are required in many professions, especially for high-tech careers, it is impossible to become a doctor, teacher or lawyer without the relevant degree.
Consequently
, providing academy places means solving the unemployment for the young generation.
Secondly
, given the topic of technology and the Internet, developing countries can definitely offer online courses for the poor who tend to pursue their bachelor's degree which represents the cost of a college education can be greatly reduced whether it’s on the individual level or on the societal level. Granted, some people think affording college degrees can help local councils
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save the budget to spend on healthcare, security, or infrastructure.
However
, what they ignoring is educational investigation can benefit local economies in other ways. In conclusion, governments and residents should be happy to subsidize universities since it is useful and beneficial for their economy.
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