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Some people think that government should spend money on building new train lines,while others believe that improving public transport is more beneficial.Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

#people #government #money #train #lines #transport
It is argued that authorities need spare more money on
train
 lines ,while others believe that others modes of transportation
is
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 more lucrative. Despite ,metro journeys being cheaper than
road
transport
 inclined toward the latter statement because
this
 mode of
transport
 is very ubiquitous. some argue that the local regimes
need
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 invest more money in the development of
train
 paths. It is very obvious that developing
this
 mode of
transport
 is included a high budget,
although
 it is cheaper to travel by
train
 and safer than
road
transport
,
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availability of stations is limited to very few locations,
Thus
 I believe that govt should spend more of the budget on developing the
road
transport
 than the
train
. For ,example UK Metro stations are covered only 10 provinces while
roadways
 are all over the country. On other hand Enhancing
Roadways
 are more advantageous because , once
roadways
 build they can be used for multiple purposes including private shipment, Bikes and cycle lanes.
furthermore
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 with
roadways
 local committees can implement toll tax which leads to
lucrative
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 business for Ruling authorities.
For example
 In India with
Road
 toll tax is collected on each trip, which leads to
collect
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 the total investment which was spent on developing
roadways
. In conclusion,
Although
 building
train
 routes is beneficial to the public with cheaper and safer
transport
,
Road
transport
 is much more beneficial with its wider usage and easy access.
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