In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?
A large
amount
of Change the quantifier
number
people
, especially the younger people
are making every endeavor
to buy their own Change the spelling
endeavour
house
. They consider renting houses
for whole
lives are worse Correct pronoun usage
their whole
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choice
chioce
, especially in east Asia.
There are 3 main reasons for Correct your spelling
choice
this
case. Firstly
, houses
represent wealth and social status. Males who own their house
can enjoy popularity in marriage
market. The same, females will be regarded as capable and independent women if they can afford Add an article
the marriage
houses
without help. Secondly
, to be a Correct your spelling
homeowner
home owner
relates to stability, which is essential for Correct your spelling
homeowner
people
in after-pandemic
era. Correct article usage
the after-pandemic
People
are in
dread Change preposition
apply
of
being fired, losing Change preposition
apply
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their job
job
and moving to another place because they can't stand Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
with
being unstable. Change preposition
apply
Also
there is Add a comma
,Also
culture
influence. In China and some other countries deriving from rivers but not oceans, Replace the word
cultural
people
think renting is a temporary Correct your spelling
choice
chioce
. Correct your spelling
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Houses
are their ultimate target.
For my part, it's a negative situation. Apparently
with more and more Add a comma
,Apparently
people
trying to buy houses
rather than renting
, the Replace the word
rent
house
price are
higher and higher, which becomes burdensome for Change the verb form
is
younger
generation and their parents. My sister Ann, a 25-year-old teacher who is crazy about Add an article
the younger
metropolitan
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the metropolitan
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lifestyle
life style
, is suffering from the financial stress of buying a tiny flat in Beijing. She told me that she couldn't afford 10 square now with Correct your spelling
lifestyle
10000
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a 10000
salary
per month. Change to a plural noun
salaries
Also
, we may lose our own development and possibility when focusing on house
only. In pursuit of Add an article
the house
a house
Add an article
a dream
the dream
dream
, whether dreaming about renting apartments all over the world or living in a small Fix the agreement mistake
dreams
house
with beautiful
courtyard with pets, we chase what we want. Add an article
a beautiful
However
, I notice that some young people
are just following others to work hard for houses
without thinking about if they really love to.
All in all, taking owning a home as a must for granted may not a
good Add a missing verb
be a
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phenomena
phenomenon
pheonomena
. We should ponder what is worthy Correct your spelling
phenomenon
for
our time and energy.Change preposition
of
amount
of Add an article
the amount
an amount
people
, especially the younger people
are making every endeavor
to buy their own Change the spelling
endeavour
house
. They consider renting houses
for whole
lives are worse Correct pronoun usage
their whole
Correct your spelling
choice
chioce
, especially in east Asia.Correct your spelling
choice
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