Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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shortage
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of money is considered hard for many
people
in society, and that's why a large part of them is giving up achieving some goals. Someone argued
that is
important to maintain the perspective about
life
while others support other perspectives. I'll expose my idea and discuss apply to both sides. I have a large experience managing
people
from different styles, ages, and genders. I've worked for a large international company and there I had diverse courses about human
behavior
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.
Thus
, many time the decision of changing is into of the individuum, so my role was
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stimulus
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for them believes in better perspectives.
For instance
, many
people
are motivated by money and so I tried to teach him how
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more
effectively
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on
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sales
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salles
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, and one way is increasing the analyses
performance
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. It worked in
the
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different scenarios. On the
other wise
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otherwise
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, the example above only
working
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when the professional wanted it, so I’m against that everyone can change and be more efficient as well.
Although
,
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thinking about
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they
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choice
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to give up is sad and I don’t want to use
this
expression to describe
this
moment, I prefer to support the idea that each
individuals
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have
a
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time for getting slow and figuring out another way to
conduce
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conduct
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their
life
. For sure, it happens, and I admire it. Who
don’t
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think
in
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about
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buying a
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house
on
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countryside
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the countryside
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to have an easygoing
life
?
I
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conclusion, I can’t judge who choose
this
lifestyle and they can accept unexpected salaries and position.
On the other hand
, ambitious
people
have to feel uncomfortable with the same situation. In fact, it depends
about
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what you want for your
life
.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
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  • moreover
  • also
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  • therefore
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  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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