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Some believe that it is good having people with extremely high income in the country, while some think the government should try to limit it. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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countries
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having
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 people with extremely high
income
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incomes
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.Some people think that it is good for the countries.While others think that the government should try to limit it.In my opinion, residents with top
income
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most
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most
worth
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 for the states and
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 paragraph highlights my opinion with relevant examples.
Firstly
, communities with good wages
are
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always lead
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 growth for the country and it will help to the
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global
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global
 attraction of local
business
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businesses
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.
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,new idea developers in
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other nations like to join and execute their
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projects
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 and programs with top turnover and hope to
sponsership
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sponsorship
 for them.
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,top
income
 crowd have
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various
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various
 business
in
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the
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local
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locally
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 and
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outside
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out side
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outside
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 of the country.It gets more work
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opportunities
opptunities
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opportunities
 to the locals and as well as
foriners
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foreigners
.
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 it enhance turnover and productivity of the nation.
On the other hand
,
public
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the public
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think
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thinks
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 the
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government
govenment
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government
 should try to limit it because of unbalance of human turnover.It
cause
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to
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the variation
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 rich and poor.The
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Region
Regime
 should execute more rules and regulations to behave
this
 gap and introduce
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 system to encourage
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the high
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high wage
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high-wage
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 public to join small businesses.
Finally
,
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the high
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high
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high-income
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income
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cause
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to
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the monopoly of some industries and
then
 the
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regime
regimen
regim
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regime
 couldn't handle it.
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, it builds couldn't badly affect
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local people
such
 as poorer Communities. In Conclusion,Having resident with
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extremely
cxtremly
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extremely
 high
income
 are more
benefties
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benefits
 for the nation and those are more than
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cons.So wanna
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smooth
smoth
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a smoth
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shedule
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schedule
 to handle them and
i
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 hope it
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definitely
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is defenitly
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defenitly
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definitely
 good for the states as well as
communities
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the communities
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 of the nation
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