Loneliness is an increasing problem in many societies, especially among the elderly. Why is this? How might it be remedied?

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loneliness is a serious issue in many societies specifically for elder or senior citizens.
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is because nowadays kids leave their parent's homes after finishing their studies for their livelihood . Many children are opting for relocation to newer locations in search of better opportunities. Because of
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are forced to live alone and face loneliness.
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, Many people leave their
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in old age homes because they think their
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are now becoming a burden for them . so they left their
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in old age homes where they are forced to live alone .
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another reason is some
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live alone because of other reasons like ChildrenChildren are abroad and they do not want to settle there. ,
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there are many
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who live with their heirs and enjoy the life of retirees. To make sure that senior citizens do not feel lonely there are some remedial measures to opt for children and society . for ,example Inculcating the right to ethical values in heir. Share their concerns with them whether emotional , physical etc. Make them socially responsible citizens so that they should feel their
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as responsibilities ,not as burdens.
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need to understand that their
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should not feel alone when they are not around them . for
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they can encourage them to join recreational clubs , pursue some hobbies or socialize within their friend circle of the same age group friends. ,
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scion can tell their
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to share their life experiences with grandchildren . so that they should not feel lonely.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • isolation
  • social support networks
  • superficial connections
  • anonymity
  • work-life balance
  • multi-generational households
  • urbanization
  • meaningful relationships
  • community involvement
  • alleviate
  • responsible use
  • face-to-face interaction
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