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Some people today have argued that countries should interfere less in the affairs of other nations. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today’s world, many
countries
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 are having a hand in other
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 politics and economy, while some people believe that, should not interfere in others' business and affairs. I absolutely agree with
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 notion and I discussed two of my reasons in
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 essay.
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 with, having a hand in another
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’s actions can bring political problems with it, especially when they do not have a friendly relationship with each other.
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, one
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 can use
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 as a reason to attack the other and start a war.
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,
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 A does not like
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 B and is looking for a reason to start the war, in the meantime,
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 B is trying to have a hand in
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 A's activities, while the other side does not enjoy
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 activity,
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, they bring the military to deal with each other.
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, interference in other
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' zones can be used as a reason to start the war.
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, if one
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 let others research and interfere in its political activities,
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 will make its information and data dangerous because other
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 can use
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 as a hole which by knowing
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 can ruin that
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's economy.
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 A is selling oil to Europe and it is its major money resource, while if
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 B interferes in
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 A affairs can find how much is the price for that product and starts to negotiate with Europeans for a better price,
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,
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 can hurt
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 A’s economy. To conclude, groups of people believe that each
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 should only be informed and do actions for itself, not interfere with the other
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 and I believe
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 is the right form.
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