some children spend hours every day on their smartphone. why is this the case? Do you think this is positive or a negative development?

Nowadays, the
smartphone
is the basic need of younger. A number Kid utilising hours every day on their smart devices. I believe that there are more benefits rather than negative effects of the usage of
smartphones
.
this
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outlines both the point of view.
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with, there are many benefits of using
smartphones
for
children
.
Firstly
, they learn to communicate
to
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people and learn social media skills. In others words,It
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way to adopt
the
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communication skill.
For instance
, My fellow mates learn to communicate with other people by using
smartphones
.
Moreover
, I would like to outline
more
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positive
impact
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of using
of
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smartphones
.
children
also
inquire about their
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and studies through
smartphones
.
In other words
,
children
by using mobile
phone
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take help and information.
For example
, whenever My son
need
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a
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help, so he can help from
smartphone
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by using
websites
such
as google and youtube.
On the other hand
, there is so positive impact
,
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but does not mean that there
is
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no drawbacks to using a
smartphone
.
Secondly
,
children
access easily porn
websites
.
In other words
,
children
can easily open
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to
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different
websites
without asking about their age group.
For example
, In Pakistan, 80 % of
children
click on
a different links
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and go to pornhub
websites
.
Furthermore
, one more negative impact of giving
smartphones
to
children
.
children
share their personal photos on
the
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online
websites
. In another word,
children
are immature at an early age, so they share their private pictures. To illustrate, My nephew who usage a
smartphone
for hours every day, but he shares a private video with a friend on social media.
Lastly
, some
children
spend their time on
a mobile phones
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. There is pro and con to giving a
smartphone
to
children
, but there are more positive point rather than negative
such
as learning to communicate with people and inquire about their study.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Engrossed
  • Distracted
  • Addictive
  • Digital natives
  • Virtual reality
  • Interactive
  • Online gaming
  • Social media platforms
  • Connectivity
  • Social engagement
  • Information access
  • Learning tools
  • Peer influence
  • Societal pressure
  • Alternative activities
  • Recreational facilities
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