Some people believe that to reduce the amount of time people spend commuting (travelling to work), parks and gardens close to city centres should be replaced by apartment buildings for commuters to live in. However, others disagree with this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There has been a debate among
people
who think it is beneficial for us to destroy parks and gardens and build
accomodations
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accommodations
accommodation
for workers who commute to
city
centres and those who
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this
idea. While
this
approach gives more flexibility for time and money to a limited number of
city
commuters, overall, I believe the idea does not improve
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satisfaction of the
people
belonging to the society.
First
of all, it is obvious that if we built mass flats for men and women working in the urban areas where currently public open spaces exist, for those limited number of
people
who can get into the housing, it would become extremely convenient.
For instance
, they can commute to work with less time and cost and that would become a significant advantage for them.
However
, the number of
people
who are lucky enough to enjoy the merits
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limited.
Thus
, those who cannot live in
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rooms in the centre of metropolitan areas need to continue
traveling
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. Clearly, the total elevation of quality of life is not huge.
On the contrary
,
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destroying public relaxation places
such
as parks and gardens will significantly downgrade the environment of the
city
as a whole.
For example
, trees and ponds will be replaced by flat buildings and
people
lose places for walks and
play grounds
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where they can enjoy holidays.
In addition
, the landscape of the urban area would become less attractive and the value of the place may be decreased and it would even impact the price of the lands
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near by
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. Admittedly there are some pros and cons to
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both
side
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of the
arguments
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,
however
, as a conclusion from
above
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observations, I believe
this
idea of replacing public
leasure
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leisure
lands
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accomodations
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accommodations
for
city
workers is overall not wise, considering the significant drawbacks it may cause to the entire
people
living in the area.
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