Topic: It is difficult for people in the cities to get enough physical exercise. What are the causes and solutions?

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Human society develops with the cost of the animal world. Many species are being pushed to the verge of extinction. Industrial expansion and illegal rampant hunting are the driving force behind

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a tragedy.

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, individuals should join with governments in an attempt to protect these wild animals. By releasing

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amount of pollutant, the expansion of heavy industries

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inflicting tremendous damage to the

inhabitat

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inhabitants

of wild animals.

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with, forests which are home to many creatures have been cut down to make way for factories and fuel their operations. On top of that, exploiting oil and gas at the sea has led to the unfortunate disappearance of many aquatic creatures. In fact, many accidents where a large school of fish are being killed have happened as a consequence of being exposed to chemicals and chemical waste from oil and gas exploiting rigs located out at the sea.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Grammar mistakes
 

2 paragraphs

150 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic: It is difficult for people in the cities to get enough physical exercise. What are the causes and solutions?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people think I school graduate should travel or work for a period of time. Instead of going directly to the study at university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of birth of Bro. Just give reason for your answer in include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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