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explaine the status of the students. do you agree or disagree?

The pie chart and the table give us some information about the three
types
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employments
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, salaries and six
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 of destinations, which refer to activities after finishing
undergraduate
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 degree among Anthropology graduates from a particular university after five years.
In
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the
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 perspective view, it is readily apparent that more than half of the graduates have found a full-time job, and another five different
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 of jobs have no significant amounts in the graduate’s destination after five years.
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Anthropology graduates who work in the government sector, have the highest
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salaries.
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, they earn the lowest money in the private companies. We can see that more than half of the graduate individuals have a full-time job, around 52%.
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 highest figure belongs to educated Anthropology people, who have
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part-time jobs.
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, the unemployed graduate students take apart 12% of
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all measured people in the survey. For more relevant amounts of figures, we can see 8%, 8% and 5% for full-time post-grad study, not known and both part-time work + post-grad study, respectively. In the table, it is clear that the amount of
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salary of
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private companies in the range of 2500-49.999$ is two times more than freelance consultants and the government sector (10% compared to 5%). In the category of 50000-74999$, the private companies are the highest with 35% and the two other
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 of jobs are the same. (5%). The numbers for 75000-99.999$ are different and
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, in the range of 100000$ and more salary, the government sector has the highest amount, for about 50%.

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