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You had borrowed a book from the public library however, when You reached home, you found that some important pages were torn away. Write a letter to the librarian explaining the situation. You should - Mention the book - Mention the pages - Suggest what can be done.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am borrowing books from the public library weekly, but I think I am really unfortunate
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 time. I noticed the
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 isn't in great condition as some important
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are
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 torn away by previous borrowers. I would like to describe the
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 detail for your reference. The
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 title is "
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" and missing
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 from page number 10 to page number 15.
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 I am not sure what those
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 are, I think they contain the pictures or the maps from the storyline. I am very nervous to return directly to the library without informing you. I would like you to review the past records so that
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 I have handled all the books carefully. But I am happy to assist
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 on
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 investigation as necessary. On top of that, I would like to read those missing
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 again if I can get another
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 without missing
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 from the library. I really need your kind advice on whether to return the
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 or keep the
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 waiting for the investigation
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. Thank you so much for your kind advice on
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 matter. I would like to follow up with you closely until
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 is resolved. Yours faithfully, John
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task response
To improve task response, ensure to clearly mention what actions you expect the librarian to take regarding the torn pages. Also, elaborate more on the inconvenience caused by the missing pages in order to strengthen your case.
coherence and cohesion
To enhance coherence and cohesion, ensure a clear flow of ideas by linking sentences and paragraphs more effectively. Consider using transition words to connect different parts of the letter smoothly.
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