Essay topic: In many countries, crimes rates amongst younger people has been rising. Discuss the causes and solutions for this problem.

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In the recent modern world, the number of crimes committed by the younger generation is increasing. I believe some fundamental structures of society and the latest environments are impacting the surge of the number. Here in

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and foremost, the main driver of the increasing deeds against law among the young is the increasing social wealth division.

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, in many

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the US and Japan, the rich people are becoming

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while the poor are becoming

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. The social divide is creating a serious inequality problem and many teenagers and

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citizens

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in their 20th are the victims of

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phenomenon. They cannot get appropriate educations, which results in a lack of decent jobs. Poverty and instability create a condition prone to criminal

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, the latest feeling of stagnation driven by the pandemic is impacting the

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and generation-z segments.

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, they feel loneliness and as their social lives are locked down, the accumulated frustrations sometimes trigger crimes among them. As a consequence, the crime rate is increasing.

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seen so far, the recent social environments are increasingly harmful to the young generation and the number of unlawful conducts is trending up. Adults need to carefully watch and catch signs of loneliness among

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people. Governments can establish an institution to hire

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who will visit the financially challenged

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to preempt

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people's

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and prevent serious felonies.

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careful and close

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of society at large, I believe the rate will be eventually subsided.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
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Finally
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In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

273 words

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Essay topic: In many countries, crimes rates amongst younger people has been rising. Discuss the causes and solutions for this problem.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people think that all lawbreakers should be taken into prison. In contrast, others believe there are better alternatives (for example, doing work or learning skills in the community). Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Today, people can work and live in anywhere they want, because of the improvement of communication technology and transport. Do advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages.

Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people think that one of the best ways to solve environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?