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It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible.To what extant do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that traditional customs would disappear while
technology
 advances.machinery and traditional customs are incapable in order to compare.I partly agree with
this
 approach and will outline it in
this
 essay.
To begin
, technological advancement has become an integral part of our life and
also
 seems it has replaced traditions.
That is
 why people are prone to apply cutting-edge equipment bringing back to the merits of
technology
.
First
 of all , The internet has eased our connection by saving time.There are a bunch of cultures which should be practised by people face to face
such
 as gathering family.
However
,it has been seen society gets more benefits from sitting at home and interacting virtually just by pushing a button.
Instead
 of preparing themselves for connecting in person , it takes a lot of time and energy.
Moreover
 , methods of learning have been challenged dearly by automation.In the past, people used to acquire knowledge only through school.But nowadays creative and limitless lessons are accessible easily on the Internet. Sources of studying are varied and classified which lead children to refuse to engage in old-fashioned ways of education.
On the other hand
, advancements may have some demerits.In terms of disadvantages, it has become less achievable due to expensive costs. There were no costs to conduct ritual customs so maybe the speed of losing interest in traditions would disruptive. To conclude , it is right to accept that
technology
 is far beyond forward and could not compare it with traditional cultures due to the advantages of developmental
technology
.Its advantages outweigh its disadvantages.
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