Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situation. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

It is widely argued that some
people
tend to accept
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un appropriate situation,
such
as
unsatisfactory
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an unsatisfactory
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occupation or
shortage
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a shortage
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of money.
However
,
the
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other
people
believe it is better to deal with them in order to
improving
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such
situations
. In my estimation individuals should make effort to remedy bad
situations
. As far as some
people
, including
me
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assert there are a great number of bad
situations
nowadays which are encountered and
people
are obliged to solve them.
Such
as
,
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unsatisfactory careers, particularly for the young who graduate from university recently.
Thus
, they do not have sufficient capabilities to find
fruitful
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a fruitful
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job
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jobs
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with enough income and if they do not accept the lowest level of position, striving hard to enhance their skills in a specific field, they will achieve an appropriate result in future.
Nevertheless
, some individuals believe today there are a variety of issues which are available worldwide and
people
are not able to deal with them properly,
therefore
it is better to accept the bad
situations
instead
of
waste
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their time and energy to remedy the situation.
For example
, there are countless job opportunities which are suitable for everyone
in
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different
level
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levels
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of society and
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unskilled
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un skilled
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unskilled
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people
who are in
strain
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a strain
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budget to take vocational courses which lead to accepting their
situations
and they should
to
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work as a
laborer
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with
low
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a low
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level of income. In conclusion,
although
some individuals are convinced to accept bad
situations
, in my
opinion
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people
should
endeavor
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hard to improve their abilities to reach a delighted result regarding
in
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their occupations and income.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Contentment
  • Resilience
  • Personal growth
  • Endurance
  • Initiative
  • Advancement
  • Catalyst
  • Financial stability
  • Status quo
  • Innovation
  • Missed opportunities
  • Life satisfaction
  • Adverse situations
  • Taking control
  • Risk assessment
  • Change management
  • Self-improvement
  • Motivation
  • Stagnation
  • Proactivity
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