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Nowadays, many people have to work longer time, and they feel stressful than before. What are the reasons? What can employers do to make their life easier?

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Undeniably, anxiety is one of the major factors which affect the performance of
workers
 in the
workplace
. Presently, it has been seen that
employees
 have to
work
 more hours.
Hence
,
this
 causes a rise in stress levels among
employees
. The productivity of
employees
 will
also
 decline due to the stressful environment. In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss the main causes of
tension
 at
work
 and some steps
employers
 can take in favour of
employees
 to reduce
this
 problem. To commence with, tiredness due to working long hours will decline the performance of
workers
. One of the main reasons behind
this
 is the overload of
work
.
For instance
, fatigued
employees
 cannot
work
 efficiently. Lack of proper working conditions
also
 results in a stressful life.
Moreover
, insufficient support from top management as well as from coworkers will cause
tension
. Sometimes
work
 is assigned to
employees
 without proper guidelines and
this
 can
also
 lead to
tension
. On the bright side,
employers
 can take some viable measures to ensure that their
employees
 are happy and relaxed at the
workplace
. There should be short breaks at regular intervals. Management can
also
 provide good facilities at
workplace
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. Proper training and orientation can be given to
employees
 during / at the early stage of recruitment.
In addition
 to
this
, management can give money as well as non-monetary incentives to
workers
. All of these will help
employers
 to reduce the level of anxiety in the
workplace
. In conclusion, appropriate training should be given to reduce stress levels at the place of
work
.
Employees
 should be motivated and
employers
 can provide a safe
work
 atmosphere in order to reduce the level of
tension
 on the job.
Moreover
, proper rest time should be given to
workers
 with long working schedules to increase their productivity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • comfortable lifestyle
  • make ends meet
  • culture of 'presenteeism'
  • job insecurity
  • technological advancements
  • constant connectivity
  • globalization
  • irregular work hours
  • flexible working schedules
  • work-life balance
  • employee training and development
  • productivity
  • efficiency
  • healthier work environment
  • mental health resources
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