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Schools are no longer necessary because children can get so much information available through the internet, and they can study just as well at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#schools #children #information #internet #study #home
Personally, I think schools
still
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 necessary for children but it
also
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information
 to students.
To begin
 with, there are many students
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likes
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 to go to school to meet friends and they can be taught and understand the knowledge provided by their teacher easily.
In addition
, students can ask and
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 face-to-face with
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another person
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 who knew the answer. The
information
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that
they
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 can get can be shared and improved
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 others.
Next
, all the
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form
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 the school is exactly, the government all fully agrees to bring it into the
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textbook
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text book
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. Schools are the best environment to find and make
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person
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. On other hand,
although
 it�s really good for pupils, the development of science and technology lately is
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 to improve student�s exploration. More and more pupils find the
information
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 need through Internet but
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sone
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 others just use it
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the exam
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exam
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.
That is
 extremely bad!
However
, it helps hard-student improve their skills and they can study just as well at home In conclusion, schools are good places to study and practise because it offers fully
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facilities
abilities
facilitites
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facilities
 to learn and teach.
However
, it�s not provide much
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new knowledge.
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