You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving a car or motorbike. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.
Some sectors of society believe that the most efficient way to enhance driving safety is to get a driving license with more
age
than is permitted in the present. This
essay disagrees with that statement because a huge number of car accidents
have been caused by older people
and young people
might have a better understanding of road rules.
To begin
with, I believe that elderly individuals
have caused more accidents
than young individuals
. This
is because of a lack of skills in comprehending situations around them. the older has led to a variety of serious incidents. For example
, the research recently conducted by the government of Japan discovered that the old age
group actually resulted in more than half of vehicle incidents happening in Japan, while
the rate of young people
was relatively low, accounting for only 15%. Therefore
, setting the maximum age
rather than the minimum obviously could be more effective in order to improve safety in traffic.
Furthermore
, younger individuals
might have a range of knowledge bases in terms of road regulations that encourage them to avoid accidents
. This
is because young people
have sharp minds in their driving lectures and lessons so that when it comes to unexpected situations they can easily handle and make sure themselves safe. For instance
, in an article in the University of Tokyo, individuals
who had completed their driving lectures in a couple of years had better and deeper comprehension of the rules while
others did not.
In conclusion, I believe that increasing the minimum legal age
for driving does not work significantly due to
the fact that the main driving offenders are older people
and younger people
have the ability to grasp any type of driving rules that can prevent them from accidents
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task achievement
Strengthen your argument by diversifying your examples and sources. Providing examples from different countries or contexts can make your argument more robust and comprehensive.
coherence cohesion
While your essay has a good structure, consider varying your sentence structures and using a wider range of linking words to enhance flow and coherence further.
task achievement
To better address the prompt, consider exploring both sides of the argument before concluding. This will show a deeper understanding of the issue and improve your task response score.
coherence cohesion
Enhance your conclusion by summarizing both your argument and the counterargument(if any), then clearly stating your position. This will make your conclusion more impactful.
Your opinion
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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
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