Most people are not interested in how their food has been produced. They only care about how much it cost. How true is this statement? What influences people when they buy food?

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In the present
day
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, the economy fluctuates. shifts of many factors.
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, The war between Russia and Ukraine made the cost of goods to produce
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increase and the financial crisis in many countries in
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; affects personnel expense payments
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inflation and trade war. The reason is made the living expenses are higher than in the past before COVID-19 disease occurred, changing the mindset of
families
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when they decide to consume everything.
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the situation on
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day
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, many
families
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want to save their money much as they can for the future. Which means they might calculate every expenditure
that is
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dependent.
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means the price of the meal is important for the household. Some
families
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decide to consume instant noodles too much because it's very cheap and easy to
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but they
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think about the effect on their well-being in the future.
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While some
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families
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choose to cook by themselves because the cost of ingredients is cheaper than you order on the delivery platform and it can save money on delivery costs too.
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,
people
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try
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to choose to consume healthy
food
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rise for the past even
in
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this
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day
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the economy
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decreased because they realise that good health is
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as important
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as household finances. Every year
people
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died
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die
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from cancer
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because consumer behaviour impacts personal health like eating too much Sodium
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in
food
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such
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as potato chips, instant noodles, and grilled pork belly. The reason makes
people
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change their behaviour to
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healthier.
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, eating too many vegetables and fruit, controlling the volume of meals that should be consumed each
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and exercising.
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, many
people
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want to revolutionise consumer behaviour. That makes the
factor
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factors
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to decide eating are changed by the nutrition of
food
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and the
component
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components
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in the
food
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. Even though money is very important for everyone
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personal health should
become
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come
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first.
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