Some people claim that public museums and art galleries will not be needed because people can see historical objects and work of art by using a computer. Do you agree or disagree?

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people
can see historical monuments and
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of
art
by using
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. So that there is no need
of
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art
galleries
and public
museums
. From my point of
view
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i
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disagree with
this
opinion.
Art
galleries
and
museums
have a lot of benefits
such
as understanding the cultural aspects of a country and
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the beauty of the visited place.
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of
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feel that if you need an
experience
of
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fulfilment
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while seeing a historical object and work of
art
then
you should visit that particular place or museum where the artefact is kept. Because seeing
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ancient objects and
work
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of
arts
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through
the
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computers will not give you full satisfaction as you see
it
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directly with your naked eyes or
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visiting
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visit
that particular place where the artefacts are kept
such
as
museums
and
art
galleries
.
For
example
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if
the
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people
are trying to
experience
the beauty of
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through computers by watching a video or seeing a picture. The real beauty of its marbles and the size of the monument.
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of features cannot be experienced.
Hence
, it is clear that
art
galleries
and historical
museums
are important for
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people
to have a better
experience
.
Secondly
,
museums
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in educating the history and culture of a country. So
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visiting
visting
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visiting
the historical places or
museums
of
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different
diffrent
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different
countries helps
people
to understand the cultural aspects, languages and more about a country. Like if you are
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visiting
visting
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visiting
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museum it documents the story of human culture from its beginning to the present. So
this
helps us to understand the changes
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occured
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in human
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cultural aspects,languages, behaviour and more. In
conclusion
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it is clear that historical monuments and
art
centres are much more important and useful. It helps
people
to have
experience
with complete
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fulfilment
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and helps to understand the major changes
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occured
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occurred
from the beginning to the present
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital mediums
  • Curated experiences
  • Cultural heritage
  • Art appreciation
  • Personal engagement
  • Cultural exchange
  • Preservation and protection
  • Atmosphere
  • Interactive exhibits
  • Educational value
  • Virtual tours
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