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University students must pay all tuition fees, because it benefits mostly them individually, rather than the society as a whole

#university #students #tuition #fees #society
It is commonly argued that university tuition fees should be fully borne by the respective students and not funded partially or fully by governments or universities. In my opinion,
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university education can be the foundation for the
next
 generations and churning out well-educated individuals directly contributes to the well-being of society in many ways. In
this
 regard, I believe the shared load of tuition fee funding promotes university education, especially for the underprivileged. As a society, one should think forward and aim to build progressive individuals as the
next
 generation.
For example
, If a student comes from a low-income family who might not be able to afford the tuition fee 100%, the chances of them opting to not pursue the course are higher. By burdening the student with a full fee, we are essentially depriving him or her of a chance at progress.
Instead
, if the financial load is shared, the person is given a chance at pursuing his goal of education, which in effect would result in a better-paying job.
This
 would help upgrade his household income. Gradually,
this
 pattern allows
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progressive citizens with the potential to be better-earning professionals.
This
 in turn would make them higher potential consumers and will directly contribute to the growing economy. Another aspect is the social upscaling that comes from a society of well-educated professionals. Research indicates that the crime rate is comparatively low in educated neighbourhoods which is a necessity for safety and overall well-being. A well-educated individual has a higher chance of having a better pay scale, financial stability and mental well-being which indirectly contributes to becoming better individuals, spouses and parents.
Thus
, having an educated community directly contributes to the well-being of not just the current population but
also
 lays the foundation for the
next
 generations.
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