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Some people think that product should be made to last as long as possible, while others think making the product cheap is more important. Discuss both views and express your opinion.

#people #product
The market is loaded with a variety of products to choose from. While durability is
main
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 goal for some manufacturers ,the other half focuses on making it affordable for the common man. In
this
 essay, I will be discussing how both, a longer self-life and a cheaper price
makes
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 the
product
 ideal in its own way but when choosing one of them, the
cost effectiveness
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cost-effectiveness
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 surpasses the benefits of
longevity
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the longevity
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 of any given
product
. The more
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long-lasting
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long lasting
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long-lasting
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 the
product
 is, the lesser
is
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the pollution caused by waste generated. Every item bought, has to be discarded after it wears and tears off, expires,
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looses
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 its function, purpose or viability . If it happens too soon, the management of all the
wastes
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 produced, can
creative
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 a load on the planet.
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,Due to
frequent
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 accumulation of waste and
unavailability
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 of ways to tackle them, there is
steep
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a steep
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 rise in the number of landfills throughout the world. Longer durability can help
in
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significantly
reducing
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 the amount of trash generated,
hence
 lowering the burden of waste management making it a sustainable option. Cheaper goods are accessible. The lesser the price, the more widespread use of that
product
 becomes possible. More and more consumers can benefit from having a cheaper,
pocket- friendly
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pocket-friendly
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 alternative.
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, Low cost is even more crucial for the people of developing countries where a major part of the population is below
below
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poverty life. Not every person is affluent enough to purchase an expensive item so
affordability
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the affordability
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 of any
product
 increases the domain of buyers. The main goal of the manufacturing industry should be finding a balance between the price and the longevity of any good. But,
affordability
 outweighs the fight between the two because, if people wouldn’t
be
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able to afford it they will not be able to buy it.
This
 will
in
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 turn, increase the cost of
product
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the product
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 even
further
 making it a luxury which not every socio-economic
strata
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 will be able to afford.
Thus
, to benefit
maximum
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people
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affordability
 is quite crucial. In conclusion,
affordability
 can help the
product
 to become popular, reach
door-to- door
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door-to-door
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 and benefit every person, be it rich or poor.
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