Nowadays young people mostly learn by reading books or watching movies and TV shows ,rather than personal experience. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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countries, teenagers mostly prefer to
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learn by reading books or watching
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than learn
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by themselves today. With the development of technology, teenagers have a lot of ways to study
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or sometimes they can learn
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by playing g video games.
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, if young
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just stay at home to study, they would never
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social skills in
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.
A teenager
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who
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lots of real-life
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usually succeed in life
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others. With real-life
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experiences
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young
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can improve themselves in
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world. There was a survey in my city which was about the enjoyable
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by reading books and watching
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as learning
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experiences
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. There is no doubt that more teenagers chose to learn by
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experiences
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, which was very necessary for young
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to bring by their side. In conclusion, I think
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by reading books or watching
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are good ways to study.
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without real-life
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, we cannot overcome the difficulties and
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challenges
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in our lives.
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