In many cities, problems related to overpopulation are becoming more common. Some governments are now encouraging businesses and individuals to move out of cities to rural areas. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, many cities more commonly facing

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the overpopulation issue,

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for individuals and businesses

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move to rural

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. The advantages of

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do not overweight the disadvantage, due to the fact that the place of residence was changed and

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of entertainment and comfort became less in comparison to residents of

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will try to return their former comfort to their lives thereby harming the environment. On the one hand,

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who are engaged in creativity will find rural

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, quitter and, more inspiring,

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beneficial places to unwind.

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the horns outside and they lose conservation,

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try to live in peace and quiet where they will not be under megapolis pressure. On the

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will cause a decrease in the number of consumers.

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may claim that working in rural

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employees with a healthier working environment.

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, due to the deplorable transport system outside the cities, the drivers may face difficulties while travelling to the firm.

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causes the customers less likely to visit the company and needs more time for the transportation of products.

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, it is difficult to maintain the number of customers in rural

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compared to that in cities

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it provides the workers with a healthier lifestyle In conclusion, the

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about moving firms and

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to the countryside is not a good approach as there are more drawbacks compared to benefits.

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, the government can improve urban

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facilities in the country which will solve

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the overpopulation

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issue.

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Topic Vocabulary:

overpopulation
urban congestion
quality of life
pollution
infrastructure
public services
economic development
job opportunities
local economies
affordable housing
standard of living
well-being
isolation
amenities
healthcare
education facilities
entertainment facilities
community ties
social networks
environmental degradation
ecosystems
biodiversity
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In many cities, problems related to overpopulation are becoming more common. Some governments are now encouraging businesses and individuals to move out of cities to rural areas. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

Fully explain your ideas

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can case serious social problems, as well as practical problems. to what extent do you agree or disagree with thia statement?

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctors. Do you think this is positive or negative trend?

n recent times, economic growth has helped many become richer, both in developed and developing countries. However, those in developed countries are not as happy as they were in the past. Why is this? What can be learned from this? (Write 250 words.)

Some feel that cities should be designed to be beautiful while others feel their functionality is more important. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion

Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?