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In many cities, problems related to overpopulation are becoming more common. Some governments are now encouraging businesses and individuals to move out of cities to rural areas. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, many cities more commonly facing
with
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the overpopulation issue,
therefore
 some governments
suggested
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 for individuals and businesses
to
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move to rural
areas
. The advantages of
this
 do not overweight the disadvantage, due to the fact that the place of residence was changed and
availability
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 of entertainment and comfort became less in comparison to residents of
city
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,
people
 will try to return their former comfort to their lives thereby harming the environment. On the one hand,
people
 who are engaged in creativity will find rural
area
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areas
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, quitter and, more inspiring,
also
 rural
areas
 beneficial places to unwind.
People
 who
keen
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on
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to create something
they
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find
city
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 not the best place for creating as they
almost
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 every time disturbed
with
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 the horns outside and they lose conservation,
however
 not only creative
people
 find
country side
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 as a great place to live
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most
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 all retired
people
 try to live in peace and quiet where they will not be under megapolis pressure. On the
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the
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hand,
business
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businesses
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 which
move
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 to
rural
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a rural
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area
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areas
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 will cause a decrease in the number of consumers.
People
 may claim that working in rural
areas
 provides
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employees with a healthier working environment.
However
, due to the deplorable transport system outside the cities, the drivers may face difficulties while travelling to the firm.
For example
,
this
 causes the customers less likely to visit the company and needs more time for the transportation of products.
This
, it is difficult to maintain the number of customers in rural
areas
 compared to that in cities
however
 it provides the workers with a healthier lifestyle In conclusion, the
government
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suggest
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 about moving firms and
people
 to the countryside is not a good approach as there are more drawbacks compared to benefits.
Instead
, the government can improve urban
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facilities in the country which will solve
overpopulation
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the overpopulation
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 issue.
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