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Some people say modern innovations bring lot of problem than benefits? Do you agree or disagree?

#people #innovations
Nowadays the world has
been
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changed dramatically, many innovations have been created that might affect our
life
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 both positively and negatively.
For instance
, cell phones, computers and TVs. Each one of them has pros and cons.
Therefore
, it depends on how we will use it. Phones make
huge
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change
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on
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people
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life
. It gives us the ability to be towed with our beloves.
In addition
, it saves our
time
.
However
, it has
side
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effect
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effects
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.
For example
, when we spend a lot of
time
 looking at it,
therefore
, it might
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case
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 eye pain. Especially for kids. So, we need to be
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carful
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 when we use it.
Likewise
, TV when we consume much
time
 watching tv, it gives us good knowledge but at the same
time
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 it affects our health badly.
Also
,
computer
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the computer
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 has advantage and disadvantage. It helps us to calculate big data and process our input as we feed it.
Consequently
, it gives us
high quality
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of
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work that will lead to excellent
result
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. It is clear from what I just mentioned,
computer
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the computer
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 has
profound
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 change
on
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 work
life
. In conclusion,
modernizations
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modernization
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 have brought amazing solutions to the community which make us get our job done smoothly.
Furthermore
,
revolution
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the revolution
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 has complicated the human
life
 system that
need
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 more focus and effort. My recommendation is to use
the
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modern innovation moderately and wisely. Because
,
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 it will enrich our natural
life
 and will ease things even our planning and expectation.
Nevertheless
, we should have control
on
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 it
otherwise
 it will affect us and our health severely.
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