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The below shows the price of bananas in 4 different countries from 1996 to 2004.

#price #bananas #countries
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Given is a line graph comparing the cost of
bananas
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 in 4 various regions of the world ( namely
Japan
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,
France
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, Germany and the USA) over a period of 8 years. From the information supplied, it is evident that the price of
bananas
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 in
Japan
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 was the highest among all countries for most of the period provided,whereas it was the least in the USA for the whole time. With regard to the graph, it seems that
bananas
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 were sold at the same worth in both
Japan
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 and
France
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 in 1996 (amounting
for
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 some 2
USD
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/
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kg
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). While after just 2 years,
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 price in
Japan
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 grew sharply and reached a peak of 3
USD
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kg
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 ( the highest expense),
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 rate stayed stable in
France
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 until 1998. After that, both rates had some fluctuation and in the end,
bananas
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 were sold at 2.5
USD
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kg
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 and 2
USD
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kg
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 in
Japan
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 and
France
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 respectively. Decreasing from 1.5
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kg
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 in 1996 to approximately 1.25
USD
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kg
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 in 1997,
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,
bananas
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’ cost in Germany fluctuated upward and overtook that of
France
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 in 2002 ( amounting
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 just over 2
USD
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kg
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). With regard to the least rate,
bananas
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 were sold at a negligible 1
USD
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kg
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 prior to 1997, before soaring significantly to 1.25
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kg
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 and remaining stable for the following 6 years.
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