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The below shows the price of bananas in 4 different countries from 1996 to 2004.

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Given is a line graph comparing the cost of
bananas
 in 4 various regions of the world ( namely
Japan
,
France
, Germany and the USA) over a period of 8 years. From the information supplied, it is evident that the price of
bananas
 in
Japan
 was the highest among all countries for most of the period provided,whereas it was the least in the USA for the whole time. With regard to the graph, it seems that
bananas
 were sold at the same worth in both
Japan
 and
France
 in 1996 (amounting
for
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 some 2
USD
/
kg
). While after just 2 years,
this
 price in
Japan
 grew sharply and reached a peak of 3
USD
/
kg
 ( the highest expense),
this
 rate stayed stable in
France
 until 1998. After that, both rates had some fluctuation and in the end,
bananas
 were sold at 2.5
USD
/
kg
 and 2
USD
/
kg
 in
Japan
 and
France
 respectively. Decreasing from 1.5
USD
/
kg
 in 1996 to approximately 1.25
USD
/
kg
 in 1997,
then
,
bananas
’ cost in Germany fluctuated upward and overtook that of
France
 in 2002 ( amounting
for
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 just over 2
USD
/
kg
). With regard to the least rate,
bananas
 were sold at a negligible 1
USD
/
kg
 prior to 1997, before soaring significantly to 1.25
USD
/
kg
 and remaining stable for the following 6 years.
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