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In your opinion. What has been the most significant transportation innovation of the past 200 years? Support your opinion with reasons and examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, we have been developing several essential
transportations
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 from the model of the past. In my point of view, In previous many hundred years ago, in my country, people still travelled to other places by boat as the
river
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 is the main road now and
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 and the hugest way to traffic. One of the biggest reasons is that people have chosen to take a boat for teleporting as it is the most convenient way to move.
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, according to the latest survey conducted by Bangkok University, It has revealed that most of 80 % of student who has been studying, have chosen to take boats to University because there is no traffic jam on the
river
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.
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 example shows that the boat plays a major role in transporting
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, the ship is most critically popular in the country.
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 of driving cars they obviously take ships for long trips.
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 is because the
river
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 transporting is quite a low price, the stations are not far to get and has an effect on the population. it can decrease pollution and improve the good economy of the capital city which connects to the
river
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 recently In summary, it is undoubtedly true that
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 boats are still the most crucial transportation for many people living in the busiest country as it is cheap and easy to take a ride.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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