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Some people believe that technology has made man more social. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In
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 period of technology, many
people
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 claims that the advent of sophisticated modern technology
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 as mobile phones, laptops and Ipad has helped to enhance and improve
people
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's social lives compare to an earlier time. In my opinion, I partially agree with
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 notion and believe that excessive dependency creates some drawbacks too. My opinion will be discussed in
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 paragraphs with a suitable conclusion. Supporting my argument to the given statement the popularity of technology
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 as cell phones allows
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 to connect freely and easily with no geographical barriers. To cite an example, the invention of social apps like WhatsApp, skype reduced crucial face-to-face interactions dramatically. Through the use of these appealing and attractive mediums,
people
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 feel in touch and connected yet lack key social skills and the ability to communicate. Explaining some of the other points against
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 statement, it is true that dependence on
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 devices is built up frighteningly easily which may have damaging effects on mental health and encourage a sedentary lifestyle.
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, recent scientific research in the UK demonstrated that
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 in their 30s spend over 20 hours per week on Messenger and similar applications to chat with friends
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 of meeting up and spending quality time together or doing a sport.
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, it is conclusively clear that these technological advancements have decreased and diminished real-life interactions. In conclusion, from the argument and examples given, I firmly believe that overall communication and sociability has been advanced enormously due to the huge technological progress over the past twenty years despite some drawbacks.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social interaction
  • connect
  • communicate
  • video conferencing
  • stay in touch
  • online communities
  • forums
  • like-minded individuals
  • global communication
  • collaboration
  • access to information
  • knowledge
  • bridge the gap
  • social isolation
  • detachment
  • face-to-face communication
  • genuine human connection
  • maintain
  • real-life interactions
  • balance
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