Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behavior.Other disagree and think that the host country should wecome cultural difference.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In recent times, tourism is becoming a more popular business.

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can earn lots of funds from travelling. Some

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believe that visitors should follow local customs and behaviour. I disagree with

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, I agree with half of

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passage that we should welcome the new

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and both view reasons will explain in

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essay.

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with, some

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believe that we should not gain the other influence from other countries due to the preservation of their ancient traditions.

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, through the food, and tea

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of the Japanese , there are many steps how to make tea. And now the purity of the taste and processing was disturbing by the selling. When

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are wanted to make a profit from tourism,

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are focusing more on the price than the steps.

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, the true processing of making tea is blended.

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, it can be seen that some

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are always improved their own business by receiving the other

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from another.

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, in the fashion business, despite the money they are earning, the trend has to be up-to-date, attracting customers and selling their own sales. New fashion styles and clothes are

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influent by celebrities, popstar or k-pop from all over the world.

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tend to dress and wear clothes as well as the person they are like.

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, It can

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make them happier. To sum up, there are many benefits and drawbacks of receiving other influences from another

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as food and fashion. I believe that we have the freedom to choose what is appropriate and which is the most for our life.

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