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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world.

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Globalization has now become faster and faster in recent years.
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, the participant nations tend to be alike. One particular recognizable aspect is the products sold in these countries are moderately unified. From my perspective, I would like to express my opposition to
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 very trend as it will badly affect the
country
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that is
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 economically behind because not only is average income different from
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 to
country
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 but the living standards vary across the globe.
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, there is a significant discrepancy between the average income of developed
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 citizens and that of developing ones, which may lead to the latter’s citizens' poor life quality and a struggling economy. To illustrate
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, it is reported that an average salary of 400 USD was seen in Vietnam while the figure amounted to 2000 USD in Canada.
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, if the market is filled with costly daily consuming items,
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 as fruits, and vegetables, the chances are Vietnamese people would refrain to buy them,
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 buying a lower-cost similar product, which results in their impaired life quality. Despite its negativity, globalization renders some obvious benefits worldwide.
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, competitive products on the markets would actually motivate companies to enhance their product quality while shrinking the price. It is the consumers that directly profit from
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 as they spend less on the product. To sum up, there is negativity in junction with positivity with regard to globalization.
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, in my opinion,
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 fast-growing trend only inflicts damage on the economy of those low-standard countries
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 it improves people’s lives around the world.
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