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In some countries, more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this question?

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In some parts of the world, individuals tend to have more information about the history of
their
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 accommodations they live in.
This
 occurrence has various results and
residents
 can reach
this
 goal through the internet and governmental centres as well. I will explain both of the reasons and research ways in the following essay. These days, people like to find some ways to entertain themselves. One of these ways that
has
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 a bit of myth is finding the previous
residents
 of their homes. I think the starting of
this
 idea in
the
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recent years, refers to a famous movie: “Parasite”, which story was about the previous
residents
 of a luxurious house,
and
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they still lived in the underground secretly.
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 movie
had
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won a foreign movie Oscar prize, so many people watched it around the world and became attracted to
this
 subject. I think it is like a
funny
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 hobby for them. The
residents
 can find the previous owner of their accommodation by surfing the internet. One way is that they can search Facebook to find some groups about their neighbourhood, or they can search for an outdoor picture of their home in google image.
Furthermore
, they can visit a special part of the local municipality to get some data about the history of the ownership of their home. In conclusion, I believe that finding some information about the history of the current accommodation is become like a game for individuals, due to media or some movies. They can reach it through social media or searching on the internet.
Besides
, they
also
 can visit some governmental centres to reach
this
 goal.
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  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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