Many people think that every individual is responsible for their own healthy lifestyle. Other believe that governments should take care of it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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people
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happening
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Abortion
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different thoughts.
People
support
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who prefer to live with freedom. According to these
people
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. That's why they support it can be illegal.
On the other hand
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people
support that aborting should be legal.
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they defend the opinion
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by
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or hospital. It should
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all
abottion
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abortion
records.
Otherwise
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government will struggle with
this
problem. At the same time during the
abortion
women can kill if
they
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abortion
illegal
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This
is the most important thing about
this
situation.
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, I am supporting all legal ways.
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should not do anything
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legal. Especially
like
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this
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. Because
,
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every health operation would be
dangereous
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dangerous
without less equipment. If
people
go to
hospital
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for
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there
are
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a lot of equipment. But illegal ways can bring
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problems
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about
aquipment
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equipment
or place. We can see a lot of
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examples
arround
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around
.
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, one lady died who wanted to do
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illegal
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ways because of lost blood. There
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no equipment where used for
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building
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,
people
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lives are really important.
Nonetheless
all rules or laws for
people
. That's why, if everything it would be under the record, it would
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by the government or hospitals.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preventative care
  • lifestyle diseases
  • public health policies
  • healthcare accessibility
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • nutritional information
  • government intervention
  • health education programs
  • public health campaigns
  • personal accountability
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