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Many people think that every individual is responsible for their own healthy lifestyle. Other believe that governments should take care of it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #lifestyle #governments #care
As a
people
 can not ignore what is
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happening
hapening
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happening
 in the world. There are a lot of problems or opposition
about
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different
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situation
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situations
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.
Abortion
 is one of them.
This
 situation is bringing
with
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different thoughts.
People
 support
abortion
 who prefer to live with freedom. According to these
people
 , every person can be free and they can do what they want
do
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. That's why they support it can be illegal.
On the other hand
, other
people
 support that aborting should be legal.
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that
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 they defend the opinion
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that
thet
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that
 it should
known
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 by
government
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the government
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 or hospital. It should
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 all
abottion
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abortion
 records.
Otherwise
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 government will struggle with
this
 problem. At the same time during the
abortion
 women can kill if
they
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abortion
illegal
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is illegal
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.
This
 is the most important thing about
this
 situation.
According to me
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, I am supporting all legal ways.
People
 should not do anything
out of
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legal. Especially
like
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this
situations
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situation
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. Because
,
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 every health operation would be
dangereous
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dangerous
 without less equipment. If
people
 go to
hospital
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the hospital
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 for
abortion
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an abortion
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 there
are
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 a lot of equipment. But illegal ways can bring
problem
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problems
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 about
aquipment
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equipment
 or place. We can see a lot of
examlpes
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examples
arround
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around
.
For instance
, one lady died who wanted to do
abortion
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illegal
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 ways because of lost blood. There
were
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 no equipment where used for
abortion
 in
building
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the building
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.
As a result
,
people
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 lives are really important.
Nonetheless
 all rules or laws for
people
. That's why, if everything it would be under the record, it would
be follow
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 by the government or hospitals.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preventative care
  • lifestyle diseases
  • public health policies
  • healthcare accessibility
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • nutritional information
  • government intervention
  • health education programs
  • public health campaigns
  • personal accountability
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