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Technology has enabled the mass production of goods with the use of machines. Discuss the merits and demerits of mechanized production.

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Since the industrial revolution happened in England 200years ago . Many industries have adopted mechanized
production
. Sectors like manufacturing have seen a sea change in the adoption of mechanized
production
 .some Industries have gone far ahead and adopted robotics-based
production
lines
also
. ,
However
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 the use of mechanized
lines
 of
production
 has its advantage and disadvantage. Lets us discuss both views .
Firstly
 , mechanized
production
lines
 save the cost of training humans , It reduces defects in the quality of products manufactured. It
also
 enables Manufacturers to cut down waste in
production
lines
 . Most manufacturers prefer mechanized
production
 because of these factors.
Secondly
 , there are a lot of other disadvantages too like the Unemployment of both skilled and unskilled workers .
Production
lines
 require huge maintenance because of that electricity and power consumption of these companies will be higher always.
Production
 can not be reduced in
this
 kind of working setup. ,
Furthermore
 mechanized cost of
production
 will be always high and depend upon the smooth supply of power and other raw materials. That always Increases the final cost of
production
 . There will always be pressure on
production
lines
 which results in fewer margins for manufacturers . Mechanized
manufacture
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 will always require huge maintenance . To sum it up , Mechanized
production
 will always have repercussions for Humans . Keeping in mind that technological advancement is happening these days . It's necessary to study the far-reaching consequences of mechanized
production
 so that it won't create problems like unemployment , or the burning up of resources like power and other natural resources . So it is safer to conclude mechanized
production
 has more disadvantages than advantages.
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