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The great differences between the present and past for the communications ways in the population

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Presently, the different manners
how
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the
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people
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have
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the
communication
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each
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with each
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approach
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their approach
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 to
present
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the present
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 and past are very broad, thanks to
the
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technological contributions. For the
last
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years
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 all
kind
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kinds
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 of
communications
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communication
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have
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 had
a
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massive
transformations
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transformation
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 due
implementations
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implementation
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 of a variety of modern devices in the community. Comparing both ages,
the
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technologies
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technological
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 advances show significant differences and facilities for
people
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 interact with each other. On the one hand, the most important change in
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current
communication
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in contrast
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 to the past is the possibility to speak and see
other person
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another person
other people
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 in
real
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time
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 through long
distance
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distances
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.
In
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this
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these
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 days, there are a diversity of devices that include wide screens where
the
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people
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 can watch
another
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one another
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 and talk simultaneously,
as
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such as
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 smartphones, tablets, and even laptops. Whereas, in the
past
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 for the
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people
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,people
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 the only
way
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 to communicate seeing each other
were
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was
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 to meet physically, just could talk by phone without
other kind
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another kind
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 of interaction in visual form.
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, at present
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people
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 write
in
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every
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the
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time
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, in
the
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a
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 digital
way
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, that kind of
communication
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 is called chatting, and thanks to
this
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 everyone
share
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 messages all the
time
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 very quickly.
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, several years ago the population used the post mail to write letters and send
it
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 to faraway places,
this
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way
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to
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of
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 written
communication
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 took a long
time
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 to transmit
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messages or thoughts between
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people
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.
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, all the internet system provides a lot of tools to interact through videoconferences, emailing, and applications to share documents of all type. All the above facilitate the work more specifically. Unlike
the
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 past, the meetings had to be presential and very difficult
to
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for
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people
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 who live
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far away
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faraway
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far away
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, the document had to be printed and send physically to the
people
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, making
complicated
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it complicated
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achieve
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to achieve
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the task
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task
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tasks
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short
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a short
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time
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. In summary, there are significant changes in all kinds
to
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 interaction by
people
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,
however
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ins
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is
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 a very positive advance
to
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for
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the
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humanity to accomplish enhance
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this
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this communication aspect
these communication aspects
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communication
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 aspects.
As a result
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,
this
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improve
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 the quality of life owing to
facilitates
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facilitating
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 the development of daily task,
activities
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and activities
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 and
finally
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get
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getting
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 close
the
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to the
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people
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 thinking in the families whose
their
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members
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member's
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life
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live
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faraway
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far away
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. In my opinion,
the
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technology has been
a
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the
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 right hand in
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this
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these
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 days,
for instance
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 in
pandemic
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a pandemic
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, the use of devices
to
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as
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way
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the way
a way
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 of
communication
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, allowed
to
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apply
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interact
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interaction
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 between families,
furthermore
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 the population can work and keep their
employments
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employment
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, and help the economy in several forms.

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