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The great differences between the present and past for the communications ways in the population

#differences #communications #population
Presently, the different manners
how
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people
have
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the
communication
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approach
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their approach
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 to
present
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 and past are very broad, thanks to
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technological contributions. For the
last
 few
years
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 all
kind
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kinds
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 of
communications
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communication
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have
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a
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massive
transformations
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implementations
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implementation
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 of a variety of modern devices in the community. Comparing both ages,
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technologies
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 advances show significant differences and facilities for
people
 interact with each other. On the one hand, the most important change in
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current
communication
in contrast
 to the past is the possibility to speak and see
other person
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another person
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 in
real
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time
 through long
distance
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distances
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.
In
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this
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 days, there are a diversity of devices that include wide screens where
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people
 can watch
another
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one another
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 and talk simultaneously,
as
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 smartphones, tablets, and even laptops. Whereas, in the
past
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 for the
people
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 the only
way
 to communicate seeing each other
were
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 to meet physically, just could talk by phone without
other kind
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 of interaction in visual form.
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, at present
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people
 write
in
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every
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the
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time
, in
the
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a
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 digital
way
, that kind of
communication
 is called chatting, and thanks to
this
 everyone
share
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 messages all the
time
 very quickly.
In contrast
, several years ago the population used the post mail to write letters and send
it
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 to faraway places,
this
way
to
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communication
 took a long
time
 to transmit
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messages or thoughts between
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people
.
In addition
, all the internet system provides a lot of tools to interact through videoconferences, emailing, and applications to share documents of all type. All the above facilitate the work more specifically. Unlike
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 past, the meetings had to be presential and very difficult
to
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people
 who live
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far away
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faraway
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, the document had to be printed and send physically to the
people
, making
complicated
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it complicated
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achieve
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the task
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task
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short
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time
. In summary, there are significant changes in all kinds
to
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 interaction by
people
,
however
ins
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 a very positive advance
to
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the
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humanity to accomplish enhance
this
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this communication aspect
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communication
 aspects.
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,
this
improve
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 the quality of life owing to
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activities
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and activities
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 and
finally
get
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 close
the
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people
 thinking in the families whose
their
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members
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life
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live
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faraway
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. In my opinion,
the
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technology has been
a
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 right hand in
this
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these
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 days,
for instance
 in
pandemic
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, the use of devices
to
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way
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the way
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 of
communication
, allowed
to
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interact
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interaction
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 between families,
furthermore
 the population can work and keep their
employments
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employment
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, and help the economy in several forms.
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