Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.

In recent times, there has been
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of controversy going on among parents as to
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children
children's
childrens
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growth. A certain number
people
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of people
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believe that tutoring them at home is best for their growth, while others opposed
this
claim.
This
essay will look at the
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advantages
advatages
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advantages
of both
side
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and my opinion will be stated.
To begin
, we cannot
dispuste
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dispute
the fact that most children end
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bars
as a result
of peer
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, they join gangs in
school
to prove to their friends that they are big. With regards to
this
, home lesson serves as a means to prevent them from
such
behaviours, they are within their family where they learn
culture
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, science and manners. In fact
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percentage of children who were tutored at home
are
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known to be the
best behaved
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in town.
However
, children need to socialize and mix up with their friends in
school
. students are not only taught subjects in
school
, it is an arena where they learn new skills, including social skills and communication skills.
For instance
, it is noticeable that kids who went to
school
find it extremely easy to communicate and relate with people easily.
In addition
, it serves as
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a place
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where their
self esteem
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self-esteem
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are build
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.
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i
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am of
the
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believe
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that
school
is
essential
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part of
child's
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a child's
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progress. All in all, as much as it is important for a kid to grow into a well
behave
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adult, going to
school
can not be
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. It helps offspring build their
self esteem
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, communication skill and interpersonal relationship skill.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Tailored learning
  • peer pressure
  • flexibility
  • instill values
  • socialization
  • communication skills
  • specialized facilities
  • extracurricular activities
  • diversity
  • structured environment
  • customized education
  • well-rounded education
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